Can someone please help me with my english essay? (its not that long over The Miracle Worker)?

HI ok Im going to name a few things. Indent the first sentence in the every paragraph, do not use contractions ( doesn't should be does not, etc). The first sentence in the first paragraph is a run on. Stop at done. Miracle Worker should be in quotations I THINK. In the second paragraph write Many people when faced with challenges just give up. The first day on Annie's new job was indeed a challenge. She got into a fight with a very stubborn Helen, which resulted in her losing a tooth.. The famiy was not pleased with her, and not very supportive. It was very tough for her to deal with Helen, but yet she perservered. She proves how determined she is with her task. Third paragraph end the first sentence with Anybody. Helen, Kate, james, captain Keller could not deter her from the way she was teaching Helen. I dont understand " that people as young as 14 would drop off" Maybe drop that and say In the asylum her brother and herslef had nothing to entertain themselves with but rats. next sentenceShe also lived with the mentally ill, and others that were not welcome in the public.The last sentence doesn't make sense. You need to elaborate more on her being tough, not her ability to help Helen communicate. The fourth paragraph, the last sentence needs work. Too long and doesn't flow. The last paragraph instead of she put I had no idea how much Annie Sullivan had accomplished. Do not use now. Just I'm inspired by her work and so on. Dont put I might read the book a few more times put, and I hope I can have just some of the character she had. After the last sentence put I will always view Annie Sullivan as someone to aspire to be or something. Hope this helps! Good luck!